Persuasive Writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I am working on a persuasive paragraph. Well here`s my paragraph. I think we should have shorter school years.one reason I think we should have shorter school years is because kids enjoy the weekends a lot. A lot of kids these days usually stay home by themselves because parents are at work also a lot of kids don`t spend the weekends using technology. One more example is that kids who stay home usually know how to make a meal. That’s all I have so far. I`ll write more when I finish.